At discovery time I went to room 14. I saw Katie, Eilish, Kaleb, Qwyn and Zoe. After discovery time my tooth foul out.Today I am going to play rugby. I hope we win. I hope I get the choclit bar. You are not aloud to eat it. I felt happy when my tooth foul out because I get to tole my mum that my tooth foul out.
A first draft piece of writing by Aden
Well done Aden!
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